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a poem by me...thought i'd share it.

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please don't ask me what this is about...interpret it in your own way...that's what poems are for, right?

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

we're broken

we've been shattered

like a

broken window

or that old dog

that the neighbours have

but the neighbours love him

even though he's broken.

we've fallen

we've crumbled to the ground

like an

autumn leaf

or that demolished building

where the neighbours used to live

but the neighbours still live there

even though it's gone.

we're still here

we're staying

like a forgotten toy

or the ghosts

that the neighbours left behind

but the neighbours stay alive

even though they're dead.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

what do you think?

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please don't ask me what this is about...interpret it in your own way...that's what poems are for, right?

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

we're broken

we've been shattered

like a

broken window

or that old dog

that the neighbours have

but the neighbours love him

even though he's broken.

we've fallen

we've crumbled to the ground

like an

autumn leaf

or that demolished building

where the neighbours used to live

but the neighbours still live there

even though it's gone.

we're still here

we're staying

like a forgotten toy

or the ghosts

that the neighbours left behind

but the neighbours stay alive

even though they're dead.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

what do you think?

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I am a huge critic when it comes to poems and music, but i must say. i really love the theme of the poem, and the motif with the neighbors really only progressed through the piece.

i loved that the farther i read, the more i understood. it wasnt just somehting i could raad the first line and throw away.

now, prepare for extreme comments of enthusiasm. because ppl here are freakishly nice =] =] =] =]

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Originally posted by Stepped On A Syringe:

I am a huge critic when it comes to poems and music, but i must say. i really love the theme of the poem, and the motif with the neighbors really only progressed through the piece.

i loved that the farther i read, the more i understood. it wasnt just somehting i could raad the first line and throw away.

now, prepare for extreme comments of enthusiasm. because ppl here are freakishly nice =] =] =] =]

thank you Smiler

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WOOOOOW!!!! That was so good!! I especially liked that last part, about the neighbors still being alive even thought they were dead. What a great ending. Good job!!

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I've got weird neighbours Too,

What on earth am I to Do,

The loud noises all Day,

Frightening the birds Away

It's just like living next to a Zoo.

These neighbours always seem to Complain

Knocking on my walls again and Again,

So I turn my music up real Loud

Enough to scare away a Crowd

I MUST listen to Regina, I try to Explain! Big Grin

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