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Hi!

I want to become an Au-Pair in America in a few months and for my application I have to write a personal letter to my host-family.

I would be very thankful if somebody could correct my letter or give me some advice how to make it sound better.

Thank you Smiler

"Hello!

My name is Sophie and I would love to be your new Au-Pair.

I live in Austria in a small town near Vienna. I live in a house with my grand-parents, my parents and my younger brother, so family is very important for me.

One of the main reasons why I want to become your Au-Pair is that I really love to “work” with kids. I think children are great and it’s so much fun to take care of them. It never gets boring, because you can do something different every day.

Once I had an acting course with children between the age of 7 and 12 years. We created our own scenes. There were only one sentence and one thing, which should occur in that “little play”. I found it so interesting to see what these children created out of nothing, only with their fantasy. That was a really great experience.

Another reason to become an Au-Pair is to get to know another culture. I always wanted to go to America to see what life is like there. I also love languages. I have been studying English and French for many years now and I think to live a year abroad is a good opportunity to improve my English skills.

I am looking forward to talking to you.

Yours, Sophie"

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Hi!

I want to become an Au-Pair in America in a few months and for my application I have to write a personal letter to my host-family.

I would be very thankful if somebody could correct my letter or give me some advice how to make it sound better.

Thank you Smiler

"Hello!

My name is Sophie and I would love to be your new Au-Pair.

I live in Austria in a small town near Vienna. I live in a house with my grand-parents, my parents and my younger brother, so family is very important for me.

One of the main reasons why I want to become your Au-Pair is that I really love to “work” with kids. I think children are great and it’s so much fun to take care of them. It never gets boring, because you can do something different every day.

Once I had an acting course with children between the age of 7 and 12 years. We created our own scenes. There were only one sentence and one thing, which should occur in that “little play”. I found it so interesting to see what these children created out of nothing, only with their fantasy. That was a really great experience.

Another reason to become an Au-Pair is to get to know another culture. I always wanted to go to America to see what life is like there. I also love languages. I have been studying English and French for many years now and I think to live a year abroad is a good opportunity to improve my English skills.

I am looking forward to talking to you.

Yours, Sophie"

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There were only one sentence and one thing, which should occur in that “little play”.

In this sentence, you should replace "were" with "was"

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I have been studying English and French for many years now and I think to live a year abroad is a good opportunity to improve my English skills.

Here, it would sound more natural in English if you replaced "to live" with "living"

Other than that this, I think all of your grammer is correct. Your English is really, really good!

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i agree with the corrections made above, but i think there could also be a few things that would make it more flowing and make you sound like a native speaker. this is very good! you are going to be a great au pair! im so excited for you!

Hello!

My name is Sophie and I would love to be your new Au-Pair.

I live in Austria in a small town near Vienna. I live in a house with my parents, my grandparents and my younger brother, so family is very important to me.

One of the main reasons why I want to become your Au-Pair is that I really love to work with kids. I think children are great and it’s so much fun to take care of them. It never gets boring, because you can do something new and exciting every day.

Once I taught (did you tach it or take the course?) an acting course with children between the ages of 7 and 12 years old. We created our own scenes. There was only one line and one prop allowed in that small production. I found it so interesting to see what these children created out of nothing, using only their imaginations. It was a really great experience.

Another reason I want to become an Au-Pair is to get to know another culture. I always wanted to go to America to see what life is like there. I also love languages. I have been studying English and French for many years now and I think living a year abroad is a great opportunity to improve my English skills.

I am looking forward to talking to you.

Yours Truly,

Sophie

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Oh how I miss my job in the school's writing lab.

I pretty much agree with everyone so far. I just tried to work out a few more nit-picking english details. Feel free to use the new wording, or not.

My name is Sophie and I would love to be your new Au-Pair.

I am from a small town called (insert name of your town) near Vienna, Austria. I live in a house with my grand-parents, parents and younger brother, so family is very important for me.

One of the main reasons I would like to become your Au-Pair, is that I really love to work with kids. I think children are great, and it is so much fun to take care of them. It never gets boring, because I can do something different every day.

Once, I had (I think a word other than had would be better here I’m just not sure what. Did you teach the course?) an acting course with children between the ages of 7 and 12 years. We created our own scenes. The children were given only one sentence to describe the action in the entire “little play”. I found it so interesting to see what the children created out of nothing, using only their imaginations. It was a really great experience.

Another reason I wish to become an Au-Pair is because I believe it will help me get to know another culture. I have always wanted to go to America to see what life is like there. I also love languages. I have been studying English and French for many years now, and I think spending a year abroad would provide an excellent opportunity to improve my English skills.

I look forward to talking with you.

Yours, Sophie

I must say though, you have far better English than a lot of people at my college did!

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Thank you so much. Big Grin That was very helpful for me.

All of you are so nice and I'm really proud to be a part of that forum (I'm sure there is a better word for this *gg*)

I hope my letter doesn't sound too native now. I don't want the familiy to have too high expectations Red FaceRazzer

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Hi!

I need your help again...

I have to sign an agreement and there is one senctence, where I have to fill in something, but I don't know what.

"Cultural Care Ltd. together with its successors and assignees and the undersigned au pair, Suih (here I have written my real name) with personal identification number _______ ("I", "me" or "my"), for good and valuable consideration, understand and agree to the following terms...

So what should I write after "identification number"? What is this "I", "me" or "my"???

Help Confused!

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